Retreat Activity on Steroids

My critique group took a short retreat last weekend to a casino. No, we didn’t gamble. We didn’t even drink. Our full focus was on writing. We gathered in our (gratis) room and buckled down. I had purchased The First Five Pages by Noah Lukeman, and he made me an instant fan. Eventually everyone bought the book so we decided when we took this excursion, we’d bring the book and work on the exercises he provides.

Everyone brought the first five pages of a WIP and Lukeman’s book, and we set to work. Our group is highly disciplined, but in this setting I didn’t expect that we would accomplish as much as we hoped. So much for low expectations. We nearly completed the book selecting the exercises possible in the limited time we had. (One exercise called for four hours which we knew would need to wait for another time.)

Noah’s book offers some advice that will strike the experienced writer as, “Well, duh.” However, even experienced writers make beginner mistakes in first drafts. It never hurts to remind yourself what you’re looking for when you go to revise. It also offers advice that writers wouldn’t know because they aren’t privy to the mindset of editors and agents.

Lukeman walks the walk in his book by keeping it short and concise. He makes his points and moves on. He covers everything from submission problems like presentation to big picture problems like characterization and pacing. He addresses common problems with language like clichés and excessive reliance on adjectives and adverbs. Through it all the tone is that of a professor who wants his student to succeed but won’t tolerate any skating on the important things. And, he reminds us, it’s all important.

For anyone on the submission track this is a must read. Take it seriously by keeping it close at hand when you’re working on your manuscript. Your future agent will thank you.

Historic Storms, Fantastic First Pages, and Hooked with Les

Thanks to everyone who submitted their first page of a WIP. As the bulk of the country is now hunkered down while white stuff whips around outside the windows, what better time to read some more of what Les has to teach us?  Strong voice is huge for most of us as readers. I know it when I see it, hear it, and yet, ask me to define it? Luckily, Les wrote a book answering the question for us.

Write On asks: When I read a book with a strong voice, I recognize it immediately. Yet in writing it’s not that easy to practice. What do you think is the magical quality called voice?

Les says: Voice is both a simple and a complex concept. When we first learn as children to communicate, we all have a terrific and original voice. We still have it, but many times it’s buried beneath layers and layers of “instruction.” We’ve learned to hide it over the years because of all the naysayers we’ve been exposed to in education and in life. Put simply, your voice is how you think. What happens is we put up a bunch of filters between how we think and what appears on the page, so that we can “please” all those folks who told us what’s acceptable and what’s not. (Including moi!) It’s not that we have to create our writing voice; we simply have to find where we’ve stashed it—we’ve already got it. That’s all my book, Finding Your Voice intends to do. Show the writer how they lost their voice and how to regain it.

First Pages Deadline Extension

Thanks to life complications on my end, I’ve decided to extend the deadline for submissions to February 1. If you haven’t submitted your first page, get it in soon!

Hooking Your Reader

Free Contest: 

In conjunction with this ongoing interview – and in celebration of Hooked, Les’ book on openings – I’m hosting a FREE contest here at Write On.  See below for details and submission guidelines.

Interview with Les Edgerton Part II

Write On asks: One of the interesting things about Hooked for me was the reminder that it’s not just about “hooking” them at the beginning but keeping them hooked and the difficulty inherent in that. Can you address your ideas on writers continuing to hook beyond the beginning?

Les answers: This is a great question! Every single page should “hook” the reader. How? By being interesting. By practicing what author Harry Crews does in his own writing. Crews says he “tries to leave out the parts people skip.” This is the best advice I’ve ever seen on writing. If you leave out those “parts people skip,” you’ll probably end up deep-sixing most of that insipid and boring backstory, most of the lengthy window-pane description, and almost all of the character’s wandering about in their skulls revealing their sophomoric, mind-numbing thoughts. By doing so, you’ll end up with a really cool book. One that gets sold and read.

Is there a trick to this?

You bet. The trick is know what your story’s about. Every quality story is about one thing only. Trouble. “Trouble” in novel terms, is the story problem you’ve created for your protagonist. It isn’t trouble in the lay term. It’s the story-worthy problem you’ve created and the surface problem that’s symptomatic of that problem.

A contemporary novel begins with that trouble. It begins with the inciting incident which creates and/or reveals that problem to the protagonist. The rest of the novel is about the protagonist’s struggle to resolve that problem. That means that the problem has to be present on every single page once it’s introduced. Every single page. No exceptions. It’s tightly focused, what Flannery O’Connor referred to when she described good writing as being of a “single unified effect.” To paraphrase former President Bush the Elder: “It’s about the story problem, stupid.” Everything in a good novel is directly tied to the spine of the story which is always about the story problem the protagonist is struggling to resolve. Anything that doesn’t adhere to this spine needs to be ruthlessly cut.

Got a great character who just “appeared” out of your imagination and has found herself in your story? Does she contribute to the protagonist’s struggle to resolve his or her problem? If so, great. Keep her in. If she doesn’t, then create a file for her for another novel. Delete her butt in this story. Unless, of course, you only plan to write one novel in your lifetime.

Got this terrific subplot idea? Great! Great, that is, if the subplot contributes to the main struggle and is subservient to it. If not, delete it. Use it for another story.

This is what Faulkner refers to (in part) when he advises writers to “kill their darlings.”

 A novel has to have a single, undivided, adhesive focus. To be, as O’Connor advises, “all of a piece.” That’s how you hook readers on every single page. Give your protagonist a problem that’s compelling to most readers and keep her on the journey to resolve that problem. The more compelling the problem and the harder her struggle becomes, the more you hook the reader every time they turn the next page. It’s really that simple. Cut away the stuff that doesn’t contribute to this.

Les Edgerton is a full-time writer with nine books in print and teaches creative writing on the university level, through private coaching of writers, and on various on-line venues. He graduated from Indiana University with a B.A. in General Studies (Honors of Distinction) and obtained an MFA in Writing from Vermont College.

 

Contest Information

Enter your first page of a WIP (any genre) by January 29. The winner will be announced by February 12. The writer of the best first page will win a copy of Hooked from me and a signed copy of Finding Your Voice. A big THANKS to Les for his donation of a signed book. Now polish up those first pages and be ready to submit.

Les Edgerton Interview and First Pages Contest

I’m totally jazzed about my interview with Les Edgerton. He’s answering questions about his books and the writing life.

In conjunction with the interview – and in celebration of Hooked, his book on openings – I’m hosting a FREE contest here at Write On.  Enter your first page of a WIP (any genre) by January 29. The winner will be announced by February 12. See submission guidelines below. The writer of the best first page will win a copy of Hooked from me and a signed copy of Finding Your Voice. A big THANKS to Les for his donation of a signed book. Now polish up those first pages and be ready to submit. See details below.

Les Edgerton is a full-time writer with nine books in print and teaches creative writing on the university level, through private coaching of writers, and on various on-line venues. He graduated from Indiana University with a B.A. in General Studies (Honors of Distinction) and obtained an MFA in Writing from Vermont College.

Les Interview Part I

Write On: You said, “The beginning of every story should contain a “hint” of the ending.” (Which sent me scurrying to my work to see if I met this.) It made me wonder, should the writer always know their ending before they begin?

Les: First, let me preface my answer here as well as provide a preface to everything else, including the advice in my books. For starters, there are no absolutes in writing, especially in the craft and art of writing. Also, whatever the standards are today, they’ll be different in a year, in five years, in ten years. I feel I have to provide that disclaimer for folks to put anyone’s (including my own) advice into proper and useful context. John Gardner, author of the intelligent classics On Becoming a Novelist and The Art of Fiction, among other writer’s texts he wrote, understood that completely, when, during a dinner with his most noted pupil, Raymond Carver, shortly before his motorcycle accident and death, told Carver to “forget everything I told you back in college [about writing]. It’s all changed and it no longer applies.” (Loosely quoted) Gardner knew that fiction standards change. We’re working with living, mutating languages—English, French, German, Japanese, whatever—where the language changes constantly as does the culture. What passed for gospel five years ago in fiction may no longer apply today as tastes change. Which always amazes me as Gardner’s books are even today presented in many (most?) college writing classes as the end-all and be-all of writing instruction when many of the precepts he offered at the time no longer hold true in contemporary story structure. Gardner himself realized this, as evidenced by his statement to Carver, but many writing teachers don’t, or they would present the parts of his advice that still hold true and point out the ones that don’t. But, that doesn’t happen. The average teacher puts Gardner’s books on the reading list and the implication is that everything in them is directly transcribed from God’s mouth to John’s ear. The Gospel According to Gardner. Not so, as Gardner himself wisely realized and revealed in his statement to Carver. His advice, because he’s room temperature, is frozen in time and doesn’t always reflect what is expected in contemporary literature. Same as my own books. Things change. It’s why it’s important to keep up and read new books and seek out the contemporary wisdom.

I’m taking a bit of space here to provide this disclaimer, because it impacts not only everything I might say here, but everything written in my books. Nothing in fiction is carved in granite. Nothing. Nada. Zilch.

Also, it’s important for a student of creative writing to understand that most writing texts like mine are intended to guide the student toward a better-written finished book or story. The precepts and concepts and advice given are intended to provide a quality final draft. That’s important to realize. It’s not your first or fifth or fifteenth draft that we’re talking about. It’s the final, polished draft—the one you send to agents and/or editors—that we’re concerned with.

Which (finally!) leads to the answer to your question. Thought we’d never get there, didn’t you! To restate it, you asked: “Should the writer always know their ending before they begin?”

The answer is… maybe. If it’s the first draft. For the final draft, the answer is… absolutely.

There will be writers who don’t outline, who prefer to begin with a character or a situation and “set them free” and see where they go. The “free spirits” of writing. They don’t have a clue how their story will end, or so they claim. Or, they know the ending, but they don’t at the onset know how they’re going to get them there. While this can work and there are hundreds of successful writers who do just that, I’d try to convince most writers that this is counterproductive and wastes enormous amounts of time. This is perhaps the main reason many writers end up with bushel baskets full of unfinished stories and novels. They end up on the show “Hoarders” with manuscripts piled up in every direction instead of empty MacDonald wrappers…

Here’s what happens. For those writers who don’t know or care what their ending will be when they begin to write the story without knowing where they’re going, what they’re actually doing is creating very long outlines. Ernest Hemingway is a prime example. Papa claimed he never outlined. But… he did. Instead of a page or two of an outline, he created 100,000 word outlines. Instead of calling it what it was—an outline—he called it his “first draft.” But, in reality, it was an outline. It was important to him to present himself to the world as an “arteest,” a “rebel.” He was a genius and by not outlining, he proved it. Only he didn’t. His final manuscript proved it, not how he got there.

Other writers claim that by not knowing the ending, by not outlining, they can then experience the “thrill of discovery.” Well… perhaps… but I submit the thrill of discovery more profitably lies in the writing of a story you’ve created in your mind. Not wandering about the countryside until you get there. Can you get there by wandering? Sure. But, you can get there a lot quicker using a map and compass.

Here’s an idea. I suspect that when Moses was wandering through the wilderness for forty years trying to get to the Promised Land, he would have been forever grateful if God would have just sat him down and told him to “go north by northeast for two hundred clicks and you’ll be there, dude. Here’s a map. This thing’s called a ‘compass’ and here’s how it works. See ya in a week and we’ll celebrate with some milk and honey.” I’ve got to believe that Moses and his merry band got more than a little tired of waking up every day to face three more meals of manna and no A/C in the tent. Think?

Planning. That’s kind of the secret to being productive. In the case of a novel, outlining. To outline means you know your story. The thrill is going to be in the writing of it. Not “discovering” it during the journey. If you think the reader cares a fig whether you’ve demonstrated you’re a “free spirit” or a rule-breaker or are a person who doesn’t go by any damned rules, you’re probably wrong. They don’t care. All they care is that the book they just plunked down $24.95 or $14.95 (or $9.99 on the Kindle) for, is that it’s entertaining and worth the money they just spent. Get this: Nobody cares how you wrote it.

If that’s true, then why not write it the easy way?

And, the easy way is to figure pretty much what your story’s about and how it ends and all that and simply outline it and then write the thing.

Now. Normally, when the average writer sees the word “outline” he or she groans and curls up into a fetal position. That’s because most of us automatically think of those godawful things they made us write back in h.s. You know, the ones with Roman numerals and things called “topics” and icky, boring stuff like that. Or, they think of page after page of copious notes on plot points and character bios and all that junk. That’s not the kind of outline I’m proposing at all. The outline I propose consists of 15-20 words. That’s it, period. It looks nothing like Missus Grundy’s outline you learned back in P.S. 102. I won’t show how to create one here, because of space, but if interested, you can see how to create one on a post on my blog at:

http://lesedgertononwriting.blogspot.com/2010/04/outlining.html

Now, the answer to your question— should the writer always know their ending before they begin?—is yes.

Submission Guidelines:

Send a page (max. 250 words) PDF to novelcliquepress@gmail.com. For a Word to PDF converter click here.